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Of Pomegranates by ~sharkoftheday:iconsharkoftheday:



If only angels looked upon our love,
But how they’d smile, giggling at us,
At this, though common, sighing from above;

Beauty’s contained and found in all things just,
Delighting in the pomegranate’s seed,
For you alone the meaning’s not of lust,

For you, a mistress to your passion’s need,
Admitting vulnerability,
Have taken comfort following in my lead.

Through moments of joy and uncertainty,
Euphoria and pain become our worlds,
And we revel or cry in commonality;

At night, unfettered, lie we both unfurled
In nylon, silk, and satin ecstasy,
As the master-mistress in our thoughts we’re curled;

If only all life was such fantasy,
We’d still be standing high above the cove,
Instead, with trust our guide, we plunge towards destiny.
©2005-2008 ~sharkoftheday
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Given that I have never actually written a "normal" love poem, this one is no exception.
The perspective I was thinking of when I wrote this was an accepting relationship between a woman and a crossdresser (from the former's point of view). It probably is not representative (at all), it was merely an attempt.

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~hezekiah:iconhezekiah: Sep 26, 2005, 1:44:27 AM
Great choice with the perspective; "normal" love poems have a tendency to blow really hard, so I commend on your deviant ways. Excellent rhyme and excellent imagery as well... An all a round excellent poem.

:D

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!Bad Bunnies! :ninjastar::jackdirt: !Bad Bunnies!
~Trapt-Obsession:iconTrapt-Obsession: Sep 26, 2005, 9:17:06 AM
Interesting, when I read this I have the feeling of a "birds eye view". :lol: Sorry if that's a little odd, but I like this, good job. :hug:

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All the times
That I felt like this won't end
It's for you
And I taste
What I could never have
It was from you
~Outside, Staind
~sharkoftheday:iconsharkoftheday: Sep 26, 2005, 11:18:31 AM
No, its not odd, that was basically the perspective, although it is fairly fragmented into little pieces (almost a contradiction for a higher view). Thank you though.

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

=dapride / *poetic-forms / ~b00b-B-gone
~sharkoftheday:iconsharkoftheday: Sep 26, 2005, 11:29:43 AM
I hope this does not turn into another everyone's favorite (I will yop myself to no end if that is the case). In all honesty, I am not sure about it, it seems like it was skimmed over hastily in adhering to form. However, I do love the quasi-lesbian feel it has. I woke up this morning and thought I should have written "traditional" in place of "normal," but its too late for that. But yeah, they are so much more fun to write and easier to relate to (at least for me).

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

=dapride / *poetic-forms / ~b00b-B-gone
~hezekiah:iconhezekiah: Sep 27, 2005, 11:41:20 PM
Poem's fine; flows perfectly, and you're right, a great feel to it. You can always change 'normal' to 'traditional' - just a simple edit button. Of course, I will know what was originally there; our only hope is that I can keep that secret quiet.

:D

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!Bad Bunnies! :ninjastar::jackdirt: !Bad Bunnies!
~HurriFour:iconHurriFour: Sep 29, 2005, 7:55:15 AM
hey! I missed your poetry .

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But light as any wind that blows
So fleetly did she stir,
The flower she touch'd on dipt and rose,
And turn'd to look at her
tennyson
~sharkoftheday:iconsharkoftheday: Sep 29, 2005, 12:34:08 PM
Thank you.

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

=dapride / *poetic-forms / ~b00b-B-gone
*tiamat9:icontiamat9: Sep 29, 2005, 3:41:45 PM
It's very romantic and erotic. Beautifully descriptive words and the rhythm is quite elegant.

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"A paranoid is someone who knows a little of what's going on"-
William S. Burroughs
~HurriFour:iconHurriFour: Oct 7, 2005, 1:32:48 PM
No problem

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But light as any wind that blows
So fleetly did she stir,
The flower she touch'd on dipt and rose,
And turn'd to look at her
tennyson